I’m not that great, just grade 3 guy tryna play what’s on his head. One day, I was just chillin’, waiting for my sister to text me and felt like this, I can’t really tell if it’s good or bad and need some feedback (nothing in specific). As justin said, if it sounds good, it is good. I think it sounds fine. But I wanted to hear other’s thoughts on this. Sorry for the poor quality, I had my phone near me and quickly recorded and just played; accidentally turned out fine.
Thank you,
Shreezn
Hello,
I think it sounds really nice. Good you can take this out of your head while waiting for someone. 
Cool Srijan, that is exactly how it happens sometimes music is like that, if you like it it is good cheers Hec
Has the vibe of a grunge song in the beginning
You keep circling around the main chord a lot, with an occassional move to a chord nearby.
Later on in the song you jump a little further chord wise, making it more interesting.
This is were the song slightly changes genre as well
I didn’t find it easy to follow the structure, perhaps check whether your sections have the same length and you could incorporate a bit of structure with sections sharing length etc.
Also, pour it in more of a “story”; with a buildup in the beginning, a different energy for “verses” and “chorus” and a real “end” to wrap it up.
Your song has no real “breathing points” and trying to keep up the pace as a listener with the continues repetitive strumming pattern can be experienced as a bit of a stressful annoiance because there are no “tension and release” mechanisms (only tension)
Putting some of those dynamics in it and pouring it in a (bit predictable) structure with equal lenghts will make it evolve into a real song.
Good luck!
Thanks very much for the valuable feedback @LievenDV
It was pretty much a one take direct flow of feel from the hands. I just forced myself to keep going cuz I keep finding myself pausing trying to cook something.
I had it in the back of my mind but you brought it to my attention that the tune don’t have a structure. I’ll work on that.
It doesn’t explore much from the main groove; occasionally to the D, C and G chords only.
Your feedback has motivated me to work on it seriously.
I’ll update in the community when I make reasonable progress on it.
The E and E/G chord groove, I just love the feel a lot. This is one of the few tunes that I didn’t hate after 3 days of coming up with it.
Thank you.
Don’t put the bar too high and don’t be to hard on yourself.
You might even want to keep it as it is, finished, with closure and start on a new one just as well.
I recently had a session with an aspiring songwriter and she needed to get over the hurdle of “writing some shitty songs first” but she understood you only get better by writing bad stuff first and learning from them
Not calling your song “shitty”, I’m just encouraging to write MORE and different things! Try silly songs if you are afraid to take it too serious! It helps!
Good luck and yes, keep us posted! We’ll gladly help!