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I woke up in the middle of the night with this in my head.
I would appreciate any critique and/or guidance on finishing it up.
Suggestions so far:
Get to someplace with power and plug into an amp
Balance sound
Settle on and sharpen up the ending
Tell more of the story
Instrumental bridge
Tighten up strumming pattern
Please add your 2 pence! Any and all comments welcome!
It’s raw emotion and from the heart. I wouldn’t change anything.
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Absolutely awesome Chip. Waking up with that composition bursting out of you must have been quite some experience. Well done. I concur with CT
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Thanks @CT & @GraemeCaUK .
Yeah, it’s definitely raw and heartfelt. My face was leaking freely as I was frantically writing and playing.
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Amazing. Simple but very musical structure. Maybe an instrumental bridge would do something useful with through the tune dynamics? Very enjoyable performance
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Chips, I love that. It’s emotional and makes a beautiful ballad… I love the bass line in the chorus and the fingerstyle . All it needs now is for you to develop it, smooth out your strumming and you’re there. Wish I woke up with songs in my head! I’d say you’re a natural born song writer.
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Well done chip 
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Good advice! am pretty sure the strumming pattern I ended with is going to be the one, but I have to get it automated so it doesn’t interfere with the lyrics.
Thanks, Lin!
Bridge and strumming pattern added to my list, but what do you mean by developing? Refine and tighten up or tell more story or …?
Hmm… That’s a great idea!
Thank you!
Great song Chip. I wouldn’t change a thing as this is how the song came to you and is how it’s meant to be.
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Thank you kind sir!
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Hi Chip it’s up to you if you want to add more verses so yes just refine it and I’m sure you’ll do that every time you play it. I absolutely love it and love how you tell a story. Great job x
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Thank you!