Hi Byron/Allison. Great original composition from you two.
In my order of preference. 2,3,1. I felt your vocal in the bright happy one was a bit too repetitive. Your vocal in the other two had much more variation. The guitar in no. 2 sealed the deal for me.
Well done both of you and I hope the school show goes well.
Thanks sairs!! Yeah the bright one is like that because so the kids can learn it easier if need be! Thanks man! I prefer the rock one but like the acoustic one as well!
Well, firstly you guys are a machine just pumping out songs
This was a tough one. First of all really well done again.
For me, I would agree with Gordo on number 1, just felt a little too vocally repetitive. Really tough call between 2 & 3, I like both for different reasons. I really like the sound of both both instrumentally and vocally but Iām a sucker for acoustic versions so I think I would err towards 3 as my favourite but itās just a personal preference thing.
As I was listening through them (and Iām not even sure I can explain this properly) and humming along I found plenty of moments where instinctively I wanted to go high with the vocal thus creating a āmomentā in the vocal it just felt right, however Iām sure everyone would have their own take on any given song.
Great work guys, always interesting to hear what youāre doing.
Definitely āRock Song Oneā: the song sounds more finished in that format; your vocal is considerably better on that version; echos of Neil Young on his āRust Never Sleepsā rock side.
Hi Byron and Aly @AlyKat , this is a very nice song, well done! My preference is the same of Gordon
Uhhhā¦love too much that electric guitar playing!
Byron you work at school? Which age are the children you work with? Iām a kindergarten teacher and we play and sing quite a lotā¦not everyday but almost! Iāve got my old Classical Guitar at school and a few Ukes, woodsticks, maracas and all those little instruments for the kids to be happily noisy
Thanks Silvia! Thats cool! Yes I do im a custodian! I just so happen to get to play for the kids and such sometimes! So fun! Some of the kids sing better than i do lol!
Thanks guys! Yeah I couldnt quite nail the bright/happy theme with my vocals sadly! Its repetitive for the youngsters so that they can learn it easy. Thanks for everyones comments and feedback! I personally like the Rock one myself then the acoustic a big 2nd! Thanks guys! Aly helped me a ton with this we worked on it all day yesterday!
There were a lot of restrictions or obstacles to work around on this project:
It had to be a simple song that could be taught quickly to the Principal who is also playing along using an acoustic guitar & is a beginner
There needed to be a very simple/repetitive vocal melody that could be taught to the kids as they are the ones who will be singing the song
The lyrics needed to be kid appropriate & easy to learn/memorize
There had to be a positive & clear message
Byron is going to pitch this idea to the music teacher on Monday, i tried to steer him in a direction I thought the music teacher would approve of. Being a teacher, what do you think @Silvia80 ?
Never helped write a childrens song before, it was fun!
Aly
Byron, Aly @AlyKat if youāre asking me about the Lyrics, given that there are a few words I canāt understand, being my english listening skills a bit weak, the overall message is so positive and encouraging and seems very appropriate for a talent show! If you ask me about the Music I am no Music Teacher and what I can say is that to me this is a really good song and I like it much.
The best part of this is that you all at school are sharing Music in your school community and itās just great! Because Music is meant to be shared and the good vibes of the singing children and adult people supporting eachother are something special! You breath them in the air!
Bet I know what Iām saying!
The first time I played at a school party where all the parents and families were attending I was freaking out and I was emotionally overwhelmedā¦Iāll never forget my colleague telling me no one was noticing my mistakes during the rehearsals as the groove was good enough to make them all singingā¦and Iāll never forget her giving me a massage on my shoulder reassuring me with a smile and saying āSee, anything is gonna turn out just fine!ā You can tell this to your Principal if he is a bit unconfident!
Sharing and team job make anyone involved grow so much as musicians!
So letās also those of feet that the Music Teacher will like it as much as we all do here and will be ready to share your enthusiasm!
Iām with everyone else here that #2 was the best - the vocals clearly stand out above the music and that created more tension and difference between the guitar and the voice - and that draws the listener in more than the other two versions do. Totally understand why you will be going with the bright and happy version for the school though. Good luck with the project!
Ok, had a little more time and relistened with headphones - now I got the lyrics!
Great! Love your song!
It will be hard to beat you in the talent show
Prefer version 2 also.
On my loudspeakers, I found the guitar and the vocal didnāt sound like in the same mix. Strangely a bit less on my headphones. But as Iām no expert, I canāt really give great advice here
One thing that I would like to change if I was involved, would be to change the guitar between verse and chorus . Sounds like youāll have two guitars, you and the Principal.
If that would be asked too much for the Principal to change between the two, maybe he could continue the same and you add some excitement with the second guitar?
And I was wondering if you could sing like in the rock version for the Verse, and like in the happy version for the chorus, higher? Would that work?
I really like that song, my only thought in terms of (subtle) critique is more contrast between the sections!
All the best to you two, Byron and Aly
and congratulations on the already achieved!
Of course we will do the Bright/Happy one for the Talent Show!!
