Nuance - original song by C_McG

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Another song that I put together. Just realized that’s three songs in the last three months, so I think I’ll set myself a target of writing a song a month and see how I get on. Hopefully there will be a gradual improvement in quality!

Lyrics:
Nuance

Your views dictate your other views

And your lies perpetuate more lies

You’re a great team player – loyal ‘til the end

Yeah you’re a great team player

But just ‘cause I believe doesn’t make me a believer

And just ‘cause you told a truth doesn’t make you the saviour

You spread a lot of lies and you talk a lot of shite

We need some nuance now, need some nuance in our lives

Echo reverberates in your head

But your deaf to the chamber of the dead

You’re a great team player – everything’s in bad faith

Yeah you’re a great team player

But just ‘cause I believe doesn’t make me a believer

And just ‘cause you told a truth doesn’t make you the saviour

You spread a lot of lies and you talk a lot of shite

We need some nuance now, need some nuance in our lives

You can choose your own views

You can choose your own views

And just ‘cause I believe doesn’t make me a believer

And just ‘cause you told a truth doesn’t make you the saviour

You spread a lot of lies and you talk a lot of shite

We need some nuance now, need some nuance in our lives

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If you can keep that up, you’ll be making progress in leaps & bounds. Doing it is the only way to get better at something :grinning_face_with_big_eyes:
You’ve asked for feedback previously, so I’ll offer some here too-
I enjoyed the overall sound of the song. Nice mix and esp. enjoyed the guitar solo stuff near the end :smiling_face_with_sunglasses:
The lyrics did not grab me. There’s nothing wrong with them, but I was reminded of a song-writing course I participated in some years ago, where it was emphasised again and again to steer clear of ‘generalities’ and focus on details- esp the senses. Sights, smell, feel, taste, sound… These are the things we relate to and make something ‘real’.
2 cents please :wink:

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Cheers for the advice @brianlarsen - much appreciated! I’m definitely no lyricist, but I’ll keep trying!

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You write lyrics.
You’re a lyricist :grinning_face_with_big_eyes:
(This is far superior to She loves you, yeah, yeah, yeah…)

You’ll just get better! :smiling_face_with_sunglasses:

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Nice to see you have a good full band style demoing system going on!

You’re clearly being creative and writing regularly which imo is the biggest key to the craft of songwriting… each song you write youll learn something and improve with the next

Heres some feedback my dude

-Structurally the song is relatively simple (which imo is always good)… basically 4 chord chorus/4 chord verses/ delayed rising 4 chord middle 8… picked outro…
It reminds me of a punk rock song but slowed down…
I think theres 2 ways id rearrange the song a bit to give it more dynamics…
Either speed the whole thing up and make it a bit bit more punkish (the lyrics have that kinda anti establishment/rebellious/critical vibe too which works)
OR lean into a more grunge sorta vibe… Make the clean picked parts your verses and then kick in the distortion for the chorus to get that light and dark vibe
Either way id recommend upping the bpm to stop the song losing momentum

Vocally my biggest advice to everyone is be confident… I can hear that youre not confident in your performance and so you stay in the kinda quiet talky/singing place and dont stray out of your comfort zone… which makes the song a little 1 dimensional… You have quite a soft mid to high voice (kinda reminds me of Brian Molko from Placebo in places) but youre chest singing which isnt making the most of your range…
You definitely have a load more in the tank vocally (you could totally sing the chorus an octave higher if you keep working on how to belt your voice a bit)

Great work tho dude and keep at it!

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Hey @BenHorrocks - cheers for taking the time to give me such useful feedback. I really appreciate it! The phrase ‘one dimensional’ is spot on i reckon - i definitely need to improve the dynamics in the guitars and vocals (and probably the drums).

Thanks again!

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No problem dude… honestly i think one of the best things you can do for songwriting is write everything on an acoustic (or a clean electric guitar at a low enough volume that you can sing along)… I think any song that works well as just a guitar and a voice can easily be made more rock and built on layers… keep up the good work dude!

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Did a wee remix based on your advice @BenHorrocks

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Definitely gives it more dynamic for sure!..

Well done dude… keep at it!

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That was pretty cool! Keep at it!

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wohow, that’s a different song altogether after the remix! I am starting to get it now.

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Thanks for listening @MollyT!