This is an excellent starter for a song, Nicole!
I “hear” the Bodo Wartke in it, but it also reminds me a little of Heinz Erhardt (Die kleine Made ) and Reinhard Mey. Maybe because it feels like a story being told, the story of Lars. While reading through, I heard some “Liedermacher” in my head, if that makes any sense. It’s because with your words you are painting pictures. Well done on this one. It also had the perfect amount of humor in it.
I’m curious in which direction you will take it some day. Hopefully it was the right amount of positive distraction for you, too.