Here is a new song I was playing around with and decided to make a recording. Let me know what you think…
Very nice song David. Well written, catchy and well performed
Very simple song and lyrics… but kinda fun to play and sing.
Cool mate nicely played
David
A good song with some good strumming. A greater change in chord sequence, or strumming pattern or vocal speed might help to create a clearer verse, bridge, chorus, dynamic to the song. Well played.
Brian
Nicely done David, I particularly like the applause
I need some of that on my songs
Ha ha. This was a song I was having fun with and trying a bunch of stuff. I had a second guitar part that I took out but may re try.
Hey David,
very well done!
I like the song as it is,
While in general, beejay56 made a good point to to provide a bit more contrast between verse and chorus in order to set both apart from another.
After all - the great thing is - it’s your song and you should just do whatever you feel…
Now that I heard a few songs of you, I had to think that your voice is reminding me of Brian Ferry. Probably a cover would well work for you!
Thanks Dom!! i never thought of Bryan Ferry covers…will look into that…
I appreciate all the comments on songs, and ideas to improve writing in the future. Song writing is new to me, and I enjoy sharing songs here and look forward to posting more this year.
Enjoyed the song, David, well performed and produced