This song just fell out of my brain in almost one session the other day and i had to share
For once im actually really happy with my vocal on this one
This is at my tattoo shop so im playing a horrible cheap guitar and not my usual gorgeous Faith Venus!
As always any feedback is massively appreciated!
Lyrics:
I’m sorry I work late into the night
I tried to learn to watch the clock but never found the time
I’m sorry that you always have to be the one to organise
Everything for everyone while I’m just scraping by
So give me a chance but not too much of one
The only promise I can make
Is to keep on keeping on
Disappointing everyone
and never learning from all of my mistakes
I’ve been dying a little bit every day
I’ll keep trying til I’m riding in a hearse
I’d be lying if I said I could keep pace
The problem is that my best is your very worst
I never really meant to be this way
I try to stay afloat with you but I keep drifting away
I’m sorry if I’m not the one you thought that I’d eventually
End up growing up to be … but instead you got stuck with me
Thankyou so much dude…
I think i need to get a open mic set booked … theres one at a local alternative venue which Ive been toying with doing but im super nervous haha!
Congratulations, Ben
I’m super-impressed with anyone who can come up with a song of this calibre in one session.
Bravo!
A passionate performance with great vocals to boot… the on top.
I’m envious of your abilities.
The only aspect that lets the song down in my opinion are the lyrics. I get you’re sad- but I’d while like to know the details. You only give me generalities
It might be an interesting exercise for you to have a go at rewriting the lyrics, avoiding the words: Never, always, eventually, everything, everyone, all, every, very, really, too much, only, keep on, a little bit, best, worst
Keep on keeping on, Dude! (aargh… you’ve got me doing it now )
Seriously, impressive performance
(oh, and vibes for taking the time to comment on a number of other members’ songs too )
First off thankyou so much for the kind words and the feedback!
I wrote the lyrics walking home super late from work… and i was feeling sad and full of guilt for losing track of time.
I try to write without too much metaphor or simile
and I always write straight from the heart as things pop into my head and try not to overthink it too much
A LOT of what i write is almost like therapy for my struggles with Adhd and how it makes me feel like im not a “proper” adult (even at almost 40)
I think music is like a form of magic that can make us feel so much and yet is always open to individual interpretation!
Im not gonna lie it would be a massive challenge not to use any of those words ahahaha…
Thankyou dude… I really do need to get myself out there…
My last time on a stage was as a frontman/guitarist of a heavy metal band around 15 years ago … Playing solo is a much more daunting prospect … Especially with my songs being much more personal and emotionally charged!
Yeah - I hear you! I don’t know what the scene is like around you, but here there are several good local OMs I go to - very relaxed and friendly, low pressure. I always go and watch a couple of times before I play, get to know a few people.
However, I just play covers, so I guess that’s easier.
Seriously wow Ben.
Three cracking originals in short order.
A man who plays and makes great use of altered tunings.
A man who sings his heart out.
Wow.
Keep it up.
This one is in the same C# open tuning as the others but with a capo on 6th fret (no idea why… i was just messing around and I somehow hit a really good space for my vocal range !!!)
I actually have a bunch of older songs in standard tuning and a few in a semi open (E-A-D-G-A-D) …
I started messing with this C# open as that is what Stephen Wilson Jr plays in and his music really inspired me to write slightly outside of my usual comfort zone!
Thanks for sharing Ben, have watched it a couple of times now and I really like it - the chords, the dynamics, the singing melody on top - I can feel this!
But how can you feel like you are not a proper adult when you can create such a beautiful song? Most “proper adults” don’t write songs, let alone emotional ones! Would you trade in writing songs for feeling more grown up? That’s a rhetorical question that I hope you answer with a loud and clear “no of course not”! Please feel more at peace with yourself. Your music will help you with that.
Of course I would not trade in any of my creativity (musical or otherwise) for anything… I make my living as a tattoo artist so that would be very bad for a start!
Thankfully my adhd does provide a good source of material for my miserable songs at least!
on top.
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