This is an update (v2.0) of my prior version which is here. This vocal is a lot more stable on this version, but to do so I had to slow the tempo… so sorry it’s a minute longer. I’m pleased more so with this version, it seems more of a completed piece than v1.0.
I recall the first version and agree: It sounds more wholesome with the slower tempo and even though it’s quite long now, it’s having enough interest to not just float away or get boring. At least for me. So dropping the tempo really suits the piece and the story it’s telling.
Well that was a nice laid back journey. Nice lyrics and well sung. Liked the 70s style video as well. My only suggestion would be to vary the strumming pattern a little here and there. It works well but with such a long song it felt a little repetitive for me but a minor point on a really good production, so take that with a pinch of salt.
Thank you for your feedback Amanda, Lisa and Toby, glad you all found it enjoyable. I agree at 6 minutes 40 seconds, it does make for an overly long piece and I could have ended after the second chorus, but I wanted to keep the instrumental outro, as I felt it came up so well. Especially as the lead guitar was the first take I did and was just improvised, I hadn’t sat and tabbed it before hand and gone back and tabbed it since. I agree with your comment Toby about using different strumming patterns, I need to work on varying this in my playing.
Thank you again for your comments, much appreciated.
Howdy cobber!
There are a couple of chord progressions in this song that are fantastic. Firstly, in the bridge: F - Fm - Dm - G/G7; then the chorus (which is in the key of C), the introduction of Gm is a delightful surprise to the ear, and when coupled with the lyrics “and our dreams”, conveys a wonderful dreamy, retrospective feeling. I also love the low hums in the chorus - a great addition.
I love the video effect of travelling through time and seeing the photo memories floating in your consciousness - at least that’s what it looked like to me.
Good stuff.
PS I think the movie I was trying to recall was ‘Amistad’ - not Amadeus.
Thank you Andrew. Yeah, I threw the hums in at the last moment as I thought the outro need a lift. Even so, they didn’t seem to be as loud as the mp3 file. It perhaps has lost something when added to the video soundtrack. You’re a fine judge of musical artistry!!