Thanks Kevin, for listening and giving me thoughtful input/feedback. I can’t express how helpful that is. I fairly early on my musical and music writing journey, but it is the reason I sought to learn to play guitar in the first place. I get what you mean on the melody…it is a bit bouncing and evokes a more joyful sense…while the lyrics are a bit wistful and reflective. I was aiming for the melody to offer a hopeful…or optimistic tone against a feeling of disappointment. I like that you picked up the conflict, and as I work on matching lyrics and melody can look at that deeper. One thing that I was thinking would have helped was adding a more dynamic transition on the bridge…that is where the tension changes.
Thanks again…
David
I liked your song. Nice vocals and you can play really well. I do agree with what @wiredforsound wrote. However - there are lots of songs out there with sad, upbeat lyrics. So it ‘s always the artist’s choice.
If you think this may help for future endeavors, I found this on YouTube, but I couldn’t find it on Justin’s website. He does have something in the All courses, Songwriting area on the website but it says No Video yet.
Thanks Pamela,
There are a some great suggesting in this…especially about changing dynamics throughout. I am looking forward to writing a lot this year…so good to get input and guidance.
Thanks
David