As @DavidP says that was a good start and you did well following the progression. I’m just starting to get into blues soloing and lead playing so not much valuable tips I can give you. One thing that came to my mind would be maybe to use the pinky for the passing notes played on the 8th fret to give it some action.
What a start of your blues road
Halfway through you had already earned my thumbs up and I am not going to add anything else to what has been said and just keep in my own mind/ ears David’s advice that taking a break/ breath in between is a good thing …for the listener … (although I know many long consecutive solos but those climaxes at the end of a song played by professionals etc )
Good job and a lot too like …keep on going
You had that nice little motif going that locks in the listener, with some cruisy phrasing; then venturing out a bit with some contrasting little flurries here and there, then back home. Thats the framework you want. Sure, some more breathing room here and there, but I reckon everyong overplays when starting out. Just part of the process.
Good start Geoff. There is not one of us who played something rather like this when taking our first steps in blues improv using minor pentatonic. You’re doing things right. All the advice I could possibly offer is here.
Sounding good for your first Blues steps Geoff. Lots of good advice offered so far, especially in the respect for providing rest and space. I think as Richard said we all start of down a similar path, trying to cram in as much as possible before learning that “less is more” is the way to go. That will come in time. Just experiment and see what develops, don’t be afraid of space. That a sustain are best buddies !